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Re: Breathe
Posted: Tue Sep 25, 2012 5:21 pm
by piper82
great story, you inspired me to write my own. not as good as yours tho
You should do what you love, and you should write about what you do. Unconditionally. It motivates you and make your depression decompress from your mind just like air from the ship in your story.
Depression is the pesky little bugger and hardest part is to choose to resist it. Fight it unconditionally with all your weapons. And i think your talent is your weapon.
After all, your mind is your ship and you don't like those pesky little buggers boarding do you?
thank you for your story and i'm expecting more from you
cheers
Re: Breathe
Posted: Fri Oct 05, 2012 8:23 pm
by Rinimand
I too created a forum account just to reply to this story. Though I think your storytelling is good, I have to say there are
TWO phrases that are simply
MASTERFUL. Here they are:
"... each wordlessly aware of the other's wordless awareness that we were alone aboard a ship with no air and no means to produce it."
"... sustained by an ignorant machine, burning inside, rotting outside and unable to die ..."
In my 35 years reading Sci-fi and Fantasy those are lines that just stand out and resonate. If you do write anything other than fan-site fiction, let us know.
Rini
Re: Breathe
Posted: Sat Oct 06, 2012 12:50 am
by ApSciMorgs
Holy crap. That was amazing.
Excuse me while I go shove a link to this into the faces of all my friends!
Re: Breathe
Posted: Sun Oct 07, 2012 4:07 am
by Danielstark
That was fantastic! Though, i had to stop reading half way through as i felt physically ill.
Hope to find more of this.
Re: Breathe
Posted: Tue Oct 09, 2012 4:38 pm
by forestwolf42
That was brilliant.
Re: Breathe
Posted: Tue Oct 09, 2012 5:37 pm
by Jakkar
Your comments are overinflating my ego to critical levels, I may have to manually breach my own amygdala with a bomb launcher to relieve the pressure.
piper: I'm exceedingly glad to know I've inspired more activity here - each story we write is a homage to the excellence of the game design, and I hope they'll keep coming.
Rinimand: You may have nailed two of the passages I enjoyed most in writing it, we have similar tastes =)
Your feedback was thoughtfully written in addition to its positivity and was... Painfully encouraging. I won't force the issue and try to write something more for the sake of writing it, but I'll be far more likely to go with the urge the next time FTL or any other game so filled with emergent gameplay opportunities prompts me to dramatise events.
ApSciMorgs: Thankyou for sharing it around =) That's the best thing anyone can do. I'd aspire, ultimately, to be a game designer and writer professionally, although never less than independently, and exposure is absolutely vital to gaining the contacts I'll need to do that.
Danielstark: Can any writer achieve a better reaction than to evoke a *physical* response in his reader, such as nausea? I don't think so. Thankyou for sharing your sickness with me =D
And thankyou, forestwolf42 - I'm glad you presumably enjoyed it =)
Re: Breathe
Posted: Tue Oct 09, 2012 6:42 pm
by embair
Jakkar wrote:Your feedback was thoughtfully written in addition to its positivity and was... Painfully encouraging. I won't force the issue and try to write something more for the sake of writing it, but I'll be far more likely to go with the urge the next time FTL or any other game so filled with emergent gameplay opportunities prompts me to dramatise events.
WHAT?! You ungrateful little... Of course you
will force the issue. You will sit right here and write more awesome FTL stories for us and you will enjoy it!
(kidding

)
Re: Breathe
Posted: Tue Oct 09, 2012 6:47 pm
by Jakkar
MAKE ME.
(please, really, someone needs to make me write/draw/design/sculpt/carve/paint/everything more)
Re: Breathe
Posted: Sat Nov 03, 2012 11:38 am
by prime
This needs more love!
Re: Breathe
Posted: Mon Nov 05, 2012 3:05 pm
by THEBANDIT240
Incredible I could see it as it happened

I really hope you right more. Also the same thing happened to me updgradimg level 2 medbay except I fixed my drone bay as it was closer and used a system repair drone to fix the 02